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Looking outward
With deteriorating eyes,
Looking inward
With fallacies and lies.

Listening to the world
With ears all aware,
Listening to my conscience
As if it were not there.

Confusion surrounds me
As to what’s right and wrong,
So I sit here to think… I wait…
It’s been too long…

I’ve gained nothing
Through meditative thought.
Only cramping aches
And internal strife are wrought.

I won’t find inner peace,
Not through myself.
What I think will work
Might as well be put on the shelf.

Feeling so wasted,
So useless and weak.
I’m so far gone
Past what was my peak.

Flickering fire,
A single, hopeful light.
I won’t let it be snuffed out…
I want… to make it all right.
©2009 ~fe-addict
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:iconnataliexcupcake:
I love this. :heart:
It relates to me so well and your words are greatly chosen. Nice work as usual. :)

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When fear crosses
onto your path, don't
runaway but embrace it.
:iconfe-addict:
Thanks! :D

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:iconglenhallprotectorite:
line 17... peace not piece? Other than that, it looks good.

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"Millions of people all over the world are sane through no fault of their own. It's up to us, who are out of our tiny minds, to help them." Monty Python quotes change randomly.
That crazy bastard may be the only sane one left!- Dr. Stubbs from Catch-22.
:iconmadkill:
I think the last line would be nice to have a bigger exaggeration on the stutter.

So as you have it "I want… to make it all right."

I think repeating the 'I want' would be useful towards its effect.

i.e.
"I want… I want to make it all right"
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But regardless of that, I love the flow of this, Excellently done. =D

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---Lucifer's Ghost---
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:iconnataliexcupcake:
Your welcome. :D

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When fear crosses
onto your path, don't
runaway but embrace it.
:iconthorneosgard:
not bad dude. seems kinda sad though. everything ok?

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please for the love of God, go here [link] if you don't she'll beat me.
:iconfe-addict:
*fixed* Thanks! :D

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:iconfe-addict:
Thank you. :D

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:iconfe-addict:
I'm fine. Thank you, though. :)

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